Class code: 221_DTA0044_12
Student’s name: Trần Hoàng Nam
Peer editor’s name: Nguyễn Thị Thanh Thủy
Date: 17/09/2022

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 3
Unit: 7
Topic: Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home
because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages
of both situations?
Some university students tend to live with their families, while others are forced to live far
away from home in order to pursue their studies
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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1st draft

Many people say that going to university will get you a good job. Some university
students tend to live with their families, while others are forced to live far away from
home in order to pursue their studies. These scenarios have benefits and drawbacks
that will be described in this essay.
On the one hand, there are some arguments in favor of staying at home. Being at home
will save us a lot of money because all costs should be used properly. We won't have to
be concerned about food, shelter, or even when we get sick. So young people can have
a certain amount of money to stabilize their lives after graduation. The main
disadvantage of staying with parents is the added pressure on family members to
perform well in exams. On the other hand, students who live away from home must
deal with difficulties. The need for accommodation and students' learning how to
manage their lives better when they live far away from home, where their colleges are
located, is due to the fact that they are required to work in addition to their studies in
order to finance their education. Students learn an important lesson about life

management from being exposed to this type of lifestyle.
In conclusion, students who live with a family are financially secure, but they must deal
with stress in order to perform well. Students learn valuable life management skills
from living away from home, but they must exercise caution when making new friends.


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Self-assessment (checklist)
Content

SELFASSESSMENT

Task Response
Is the essay at least 250 words?

Yes

Is the topic identified in the introduction?

Yes

Does the thesis statement discuss both views as being asked?

Yes

Is each paragraph related to the topic?

Yes


Does the conclusion summarize both views and state the writer’s opinion?

Yes

Coherence & Cohesion
Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs, and one conclusion in the
essay?

Yes

Is there a clear topic sentence in each paragraph?

Yes

Are relevant examples and/or other supporting details (explanation, reasons,
…) included?

Yes

Are the sentences well linked together using appropriate cohesive devices?

Yes

Lexical Resource
Has the question been suitably paraphrased?

Yes

Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been avoided?


Yes

Have spelling and word-choice errors been checked?

Yes

Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary?

Yes

Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to the topic?

Yes

Grammar Range and Accuracy
Has a range of simple, compound, and complex sentences been used?

Yes

Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been checked?

Yes

Are most sentences error-free?

Yes

Has correct punctuation been used?

Yes


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Peer assessment (checklist)


Content

PEER
ASSESSMENT

Comments/
Suggestions

Task Response
Is the essay at least 250 words?

Good

Is the topic identified in the introduction?

Good

Does the thesis statement discuss both views as
being asked?

Good

Is each paragraph related to the topic?


Good

Does the conclusion summarize both views and
state the writer’s opinion?

Good

Coherence & Cohesion
Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs,
and one conclusion in the essay?

Good

Is there a clear topic sentence in each
paragraph?

Good

Are relevant examples and/or other supporting
details (explanation, reasons, …) included?

Good

Are the sentences well linked together using
appropriate cohesive devices?

Good

Lexical Resource
Has the question been suitably paraphrased?


Good

Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been
avoided?

Good

Have spelling and word-choice errors been
checked?

Good

Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary?

Good

Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to
the topic?

Good

Grammar Range and Accuracy
Has a range of simple, compound, and complex
sentences been used?

Good

Have the verb tenses and subject-verb
agreement been checked?


Good

Are most sentences error-free?

Good


Has correct punctuation been used?

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Good

Final version

Many people say that going to university will get you a good job. Some university
students tend to live with their families, while others are forced to live far away from
home in order to pursue their studies. These scenarios have benefits and drawbacks
that will be described in this essay.
On the one hand, there are some arguments in favor of staying at home. Being at home
will save us a lot of money because all costs should be used properly. We won't have to
be concerned about food, shelter, or even when we get sick. So young people can have
a certain amount of money to stabilize their lives after graduation. The main
disadvantage of staying with parents is the added pressure on family members to
perform well in exams. On the other hand, students who live away from home must
deal with difficulties. The need for accommodation and students' learning how to
manage their lives better when they live far away from home, where their colleges are
located, is due to the fact that they are required to work in addition to their studies in
order to finance their education. Students learn an important lesson about life

management from being exposed to this type of lifestyle.
In conclusion, students who live with a family are financially secure, but they must deal
with stress in order to perform well. Students learn valuable life management skills
from living away from home, but they must exercise caution when making new friends.
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Rubric for grading


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